हम तेरे दर पे आये सपना बन कर,
कभी इस सपने को देख लो अपना बन कर,
जब ये सपना बदल जायेगा हकीक़त में,
फिर हमें भूल जाओगे सपना समझ कर|
cont...
कभी इस सपने को देख लो अपना बन कर,
जब ये सपना बदल जायेगा हकीक़त में,
फिर हमें भूल जाओगे सपना समझ कर|
cont...
10 comments:
wat is meant by cont... at d end of this post? r u abt to post nething more in continuation wid this one? coz i cudnt fully appreciate this one...may b i'll understand better when i get to read ur next post.
cheers
Viraj
well cont means that, more of these unleashed thoughts will follow...which i hadnt shared with ne1..but its bad that u didnt like it.
lolz...i understand wat cont... mean :D
btw, i never said tht i dint like it...i just said tht my trivial mind cudnt understand it coz i cudnt relate it to ne of experiences in my life...i jus said tht i 'll probably understand things better ven i get to read more of ur "thougths unleashed" series. write on!
:)
Viraj
btw, i just saw ur comment on my blog.
thnx to engg xams n my "start at the very last min" habit, i cudnt get time to see it earlier.
it is kinda flattering to hear tht i cud inspire u. n as u wrote thre tht it is direct frm dil se, u shud not worry abt people's opinion of ur work...u just write ur heart out, y care for wat others n for tht matter wat I say?
cheers
Viraj
btw, just a suggestion...
try to use words of urdu as far as possible in shayri....shayri is actually written in urdu only....but thn in its modern form, use of words of hindi is ok but if u use words of urdu more, it wud hav more appeal. for ex. u cud hav used khwab for sapna n so on.
btw, this is nt criticism...just a suggestion.
:)
Viraj
thanks alot for ur suggestion...but the thing is i wrote this shayari way back...some 6 yrs back..this is the first sher i wrote...so its kind of special...n that time i didnt think of urdu words..just wht ever came to mind i wrote...but frm now on i will keep wht u said in mind...c yea.
no entry for a long time?
Hey Prits,
Your introduction "About Me" has got a touch of poetry. I am yet to read all your post. Anyways, nice to see you blogging.
Thanks payal...for u comments..u r the same payal i knw..right?
I didnt knw u also do bloggin..do let me knw..n continue to pour ur suggestions..tc
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